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July 21, 2013
Great use of enjambment to soften the edges of a very rigid form (suggester's words): Independence is by ~MermaidInDisguise.
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Literature Text
Once the wind caught on the sea
And its dress snagged upon the crests
Like a girl who couldn't help falling
For a boy with too many cracks
Then the wind tumbled between the waves
Crashing with the water when it couldn't find the sky.
I always wanted to live in the sky,
Wrap clouds around me--dip myself into the sea--
And wander into roaring waves
Of emptiness; Rush as the sun crests
Rush like wind and water into the cracks
Of myself, so that maybe I'll stop falling
For people who can't keep themselves from falling
Down, and who won't quit looking at the sky
So they can avoid all the cracks
In the sidewalk as they weave through a people-sea.
Well, I'm not used to riding the crests
Of others' success; I'll make my own waves.
So though my hair falls down in amber waves
I fear the strands will keep on falling
And my white-wash hands in lunar crests
Won't show you a spacious sky
Unless you want to see
Through star-spangled cracks.
Eyes and eggshells shattered, tiny cracks
And the tears streaming gallantly, pulsing waves
Of heartsickness; sobs that could choke a sea
Or seven, and then my heart is falling
Once more into the rising sky.
Sometimes it sinks, sometimes it crests.
But in the hottest months, it always crests
And under summer rays my spirit cracks
So all my spring hopes float about, sky-
Bound, puffed up, in ballooning waves
And you wonder "Why aren't they falling?"
And it's because they're empty, and you are full under the sea.
Don't pretend like I'm the wind trapped between crests and waves.
I know the cracks I step on, an I'm tired of falling,
So let me be the sky, and I'll catch the sea.
And its dress snagged upon the crests
Like a girl who couldn't help falling
For a boy with too many cracks
Then the wind tumbled between the waves
Crashing with the water when it couldn't find the sky.
I always wanted to live in the sky,
Wrap clouds around me--dip myself into the sea--
And wander into roaring waves
Of emptiness; Rush as the sun crests
Rush like wind and water into the cracks
Of myself, so that maybe I'll stop falling
For people who can't keep themselves from falling
Down, and who won't quit looking at the sky
So they can avoid all the cracks
In the sidewalk as they weave through a people-sea.
Well, I'm not used to riding the crests
Of others' success; I'll make my own waves.
So though my hair falls down in amber waves
I fear the strands will keep on falling
And my white-wash hands in lunar crests
Won't show you a spacious sky
Unless you want to see
Through star-spangled cracks.
Eyes and eggshells shattered, tiny cracks
And the tears streaming gallantly, pulsing waves
Of heartsickness; sobs that could choke a sea
Or seven, and then my heart is falling
Once more into the rising sky.
Sometimes it sinks, sometimes it crests.
But in the hottest months, it always crests
And under summer rays my spirit cracks
So all my spring hopes float about, sky-
Bound, puffed up, in ballooning waves
And you wonder "Why aren't they falling?"
And it's because they're empty, and you are full under the sea.
Don't pretend like I'm the wind trapped between crests and waves.
I know the cracks I step on, an I'm tired of falling,
So let me be the sky, and I'll catch the sea.
Literature
the first day of spring
you are new in the way flowers are new:
brilliant green, soft purple,
the good smell of rain and soil.
let the miserable winter wind
chase its own tail for a while;
there’s something beautifulwonderfulmine
at the end of a sunlit driveway.
Literature
ocean lungs
you weigh something like gravity
in my tired expanse. you are
sand;
(my once splendid mountain)
my love is the ocean
that has worn you down.
with my monstrous tongue,
i pulled you in.
as you fall,
sweeping peacefully into the depths
and filling each crevice,
i am learning to inhale shores.
some would say i'm suffocating
and bring me buckets of air (only to have it
escape my slippery grip).
no, the tides need something heavy
to make of her
a home.
Literature
just wave goodbye
dearest,
today i was
the ocean.
i tried to
reach the
forest but
could only get
as far as sand before the
cratered moon pulled me back again.
ankles
the of
at shrie-
i bit king,
shivering
children and retreated
back into my cocoon of
plankton and salt. i crashed and
rushed, i
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Since mentioning my love of fixed forms and my willingness to try anything once, I was asked to attempt a sestina a few months ago. And here is the result.
I found the hardest part to be the beginning, though I suppose that can go for many things. Still, choosing six words to repeat is a tumultuous task.
Despite its odd phrasing and seemingly meaningless details, every line in this poem has a meaning. You can divine it for yourself. Good luck!
I found the hardest part to be the beginning, though I suppose that can go for many things. Still, choosing six words to repeat is a tumultuous task.
Despite its odd phrasing and seemingly meaningless details, every line in this poem has a meaning. You can divine it for yourself. Good luck!
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