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Once the wind caught on the sea
And its dress snagged upon the crests
Like a girl who couldn't help falling
For a boy with too many cracks
Then the wind tumbled between the waves
Crashing with the water when it couldn't find the sky.

I always wanted to live in the sky,
Wrap clouds around me--dip myself into the sea--
And wander into roaring waves
Of emptiness; Rush as the sun crests
Rush like wind and water into the cracks
Of myself, so that maybe I'll stop falling

For people who can't keep themselves from falling
Down, and who won't quit looking at the sky
So they can avoid all the cracks
In the sidewalk as they weave through a people-sea.
Well, I'm not used to riding the crests
Of others' success; I'll make my own waves.

So though my hair falls down in amber waves
I fear the strands will keep on falling
And my white-wash hands in lunar crests
Won't show you a spacious sky
Unless you want to see
Through star-spangled cracks.

Eyes and eggshells shattered, tiny cracks
And the tears streaming gallantly, pulsing waves
Of heartsickness; sobs that could choke a sea
Or seven, and then my heart is falling
Once more into the rising sky.
Sometimes it sinks, sometimes it crests.

But in the hottest months, it always crests
And under summer rays my spirit cracks
So all my spring hopes float about, sky-
Bound, puffed up, in ballooning waves
And you wonder "Why aren't they falling?"
And it's because they're empty, and you are full under the sea.

Don't pretend like I'm the wind trapped between crests and waves.
I know the cracks I step on, an I'm tired of falling,
So let me be the sky, and I'll catch the sea.
Since mentioning my love of fixed forms and my willingness to try anything once, I was asked to attempt a sestina a few months ago. And here is the result.

I found the hardest part to be the beginning, though I suppose that can go for many things. Still, choosing six words to repeat is a tumultuous task.

Despite its odd phrasing and seemingly meaningless details, every line in this poem has a meaning. You can divine it for yourself. Good luck!
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Given 2013-07-21
Great use of enjambment to soften the edges of a very rigid form (suggester's words): Independence is by ~MermaidInDisguise. ( Suggested by tiganusi and Featured by neurotype )
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TheGalleryOfEve Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
Congratulations on your well-deserved DD!!! :iconflyingheartsplz::iconlainloveplz::iconflyingheartsplz: :clap::clap::clap:
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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SimplySilent Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
:heart: Congrats on the DD! :clap:
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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Invisible-Neko Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Hetalia?
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Probably not, since I have absolutely no knowledge whatsoever of it (I've read some interesting fanfics, though). 

Buuut as I said, you can interpret it however you want. :)
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Invisible-Neko Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Yay :D
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Schneefuechsin Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
:iconcongratsddplz:
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! :0
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AbbyMeyer Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013
You pull off this form so well that I hadn't even realised that it was a sestina until I saw your comment! 
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you...I think, haha! 
No, really, I appreciate your comment. That's what I love about sestinas, there's so much versatility!
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MrsNox Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, this is awesome. ^^
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks! I'm glad you liked it.
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WikkidX Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Ahh, this is masterful. The way you use those six words as a pivot to spring off in every direction, yet still form a cohesive whole, is wonderful. A well-deserved DD!
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! I'm so glad you enjoyed it!
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Savoci Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I can see why you got DD! This is amazing. Well done :heart:
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow, thank you!
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Savoci Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Of course! :)
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    Congrats on the DD! :dalove:
    Have a nice day! :heart:
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thanks!
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lintu47 Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
    My pleasure :happybounce:
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Student Writer
You need to get more recognition for this. This is a very difficult form to pull of smoothly, and damn, is this smooth. I didn't realize it was a sestina at first; I thought you were simply taking the same elements and repeating them in different contexts, like slowly rotating an object I thought was one thing until I see all sides of it, at which point I realize it is many things. Or all things. This is brilliant.
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 21, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't even know where to begin! I want to thank you for reading it all the way through, and also thank you for saying such wonderful things! I won't mind if it doesn't get more recognition, this comment was enough for me, haha! 
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AMWeitz Featured By Owner Jul 22, 2013  Student Writer
Ahh, that's sweet! I'm glad it made you happy. Keep writing! :)
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tiganusi Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Professional
The natural, conversational flow in this is goddamn amazing.
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MermaidInDisguise Featured By Owner Jul 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you! That's just how it...happened, I suppose.
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